I am a Year 8 student at Tamaki Primary School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Room 10 and my teacher is Miss Kyla.
Hi Curtys, I like the way your story is well sequenced and clear. Next time I think you should try to include some adjectives and similes. Maybe you could describe your favourite part of the day, for example how you felt coming down the water slide.
Hi Curtys, I like the way your story is well sequenced and clear. Next time I think you should try to include some adjectives and similes. Maybe you could describe your favourite part of the day, for example how you felt coming down the water slide.
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